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Sonja Burke


A couple of weeks ago, all EVHS staff had a meeting discussing the possibility of graduation 2010 taking place on the Saturday before the last day of school. It would be the first time in Eastview history that graduation takes place on a Saturday instead of the Friday after the last day of school. Since the school year can't start before labor day, the calendar has been "pushed" as Hori Sensei says, and is in need of adjustments. Graduation for the class of 2010 could possibly take place on Saturday, June 5th, 2010. Seniors next year would not have to attend the last week of school unlike all underclassmen who will have to attend school until Thursday, June 10th, 2010.Many students that will be seniors next year, such as Ronnie Allen who found out about the possibility of an early graduation through a friend, would be very happy with this decision. "I think it's a great idea to get out of school a week early," says Ronnie, "All we do during the last week of school is watch movies anyway. It just seems like a waste of time, we might as well be done with school."The good news of the likeliness that this will happen is spreading throughout this year's junior class quickly. However, not many of our current seniors have heard about it. "What?! Are you kidding me?" yells Danny Vi, an angered senior who will be graduating next month. Danny called the whole idea "retarded and unfair." "This should have been done for this year's graduating class!" He states that the only thing good about the last week of school is seeing friends for a couple more days."An unbiased opinion comes from Hori Sensei, the Japanese teacher at EVHS. "I think it's be an okay idea for graduation to be on a Saturday instead of a Friday. It would be more convenient for family members to come to graduation on a Saturday. In Japan, graduations are always on Saturdays, so I'm used to the idea."

Where can i start, um the frist sentence caught me off guard and made me amazed. On the other hand some parts lost me. Overall she should rethink the story line and develop her idea more. It made me think a lot and jump in the middle but it lost its edge at the end.